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Although this walk is hard, it’s still a lot of fun. We stop to have small brake. I can see fritanga, he had two photos of his sons on either side of him. We stop  by a sines to take a photo. My shoulder are sore from my bag and my feet were bored of walking. I feel tired, I want to lay down but I keep going. I can see green tall trees. I breathe in the air, cold and fresh, around me.  

The ground is, hard like a rock, messy like my room and full of plants.

As I go to left nicole, I hope I don’t drop her. The song cheerleader is on. It made me happy to dance and toldy fail with my friends. Zoe and I Were on the end and forgot what we were meant to do.  The dance was short, bad and fun. Now that it’s over all I can do is laugh.

Sentence Types

Opener Sentence

30 0f march

While we were caving, I saw cave wetas.

If I could do the trust fall again, I would not.

Although the bed were hard, I was able to get to sleep

Serial pattern

The trust fall was, intense like a battle, fast as a race and scary like haunted house.

The caves were, tight as a shoe that is too small , cold as an ice storm and damp like it had just rained.

On the walk, sore shoulders, hard rock like ground and a long way to go

Interrupter Sentence

The bed were hard, like a brick, but I could still sleep

I wonder if I could climb that tree,tall and brown, way over there

The rock climbing wall is , hard and small,as tough as can be