If I was A

If I Were A… Bird

I would dance below the clouds

I would let the wind brush past me.

I would be a soft bird, gentle and loving

The world would be my playground

With no one to tell me what to do  

If only I was a bird

If I was a… flower

If I was a flower I would watch the day go by

I would be white with a soft yellow middle

I would be placed in a garden full of roses

And one day I would be picked by the sweetest little girl

Arriving in kingston

I have a photo. It was taken by my dad 2015 A photo of us me Jessie and Bennie I am young, about 10 There we are my house Christmas day, just the family and me, sitting on the couch in the music room  with the fireplace in front of us, on either side of me is Jessie and Bennie. Behind the fireplace is a pool where we play in the summer.

My Palindrome Peom

Dreamers

Speech to speaker

Friends around me

Inspiring

Around me friends

Speaker to speech

Dreamers

the house was usual enough

The house was usual enough; it had

A library, a music room, a kitchen, a dog

With four little paws he ran around on and even a big lawn

I like. My brother, my best friend and I

Did what all kids do-play minecraft all

Day, go biking round the roundabout, dodge parents like Spies, crawl around in the flax tunnels and

Play bang when night falls

Tall dark trees, climb or swim

Doing nothing important.

Sentence Types

Opener Sentence

30 0f march

While we were caving, I saw cave wetas.

If I could do the trust fall again, I would not.

Although the bed were hard, I was able to get to sleep

Serial pattern

The trust fall was, intense like a battle, fast as a race and scary like haunted house.

The caves were, tight as a shoe that is too small , cold as an ice storm and damp like it had just rained.

On the walk, sore shoulders, hard rock like ground and a long way to go

Interrupter Sentence

The bed were hard, like a brick, but I could still sleep

I wonder if I could climb that tree,tall and brown, way over there

The rock climbing wall is , hard and small,as tough as can be

a poem about my family

My family is weird

You will think That we are crazy

Family, we have a big family

Amazing, How my dad is so busy

Memories, we have lots of good memories
I am the youngest in the family

Lily the baby in the family

Your now thinking, Wow

The movies was usual enough

The movies was usual enough; it had

A popcorn machine, a counter, and a Cinderella poster

That was taller than me. Nicole and me

did what girl do when waiting- stood and talked

Till we were let in, walked into the cinema, sat in the

top row, watched like eagles through the

Soft loud movie,

At the end we walked out and talked

Doing nothing important.

                                                                              

by Lily

The night he died

The night he died

A long time ago  in a little home a family lived. One day the father went out into the forest. He went looking for food and then he heard a nosce. He saw the bushes move and a - tiger twist his size jumped out. so he ran and ran, he lost it but then he noticed  he was lost.

The father began to say

“help me I want to go home I can not cook I have a wife and 2 kids”.

He look and look for food but he found nothing.. So he ran to look water but instead he found a puppy. It was a fluff ball. It was white with a touch yellowy gold.

“I will name you dear friend. Let me trame you.” So tramed him.

He was cold and it was dark. The forest was big and he was small. 5 days later at night he died, then wolf's eat the dead body and then walked off into a dark and gloomy cave. So dear friend ran away.  For then the wife went looking of him all that she found where his ripped closes and blood everywhere.    

By Lily, One of the dead mans kids

Best Times

Success Criteria

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Best Times

This is a story of my holidays, when we were on the break from school. A time to be with your friends and family. Hope you enjoy it.

We were driving and driving but then I saw the snow on the hills. When we got there we went tobogganing. Plus we make this awesome snow man. I climbed up hills and broke the ice on the rocks and pushed the snow off the hill.

When we were at the snow, we stayed at the Chateau. It was so big and there was a tv in my room. We had big dinners and breakfasts. My dad had 7 and 6 bits of bacon and I went crazy went dessert.

After we left the Chateau we went to the caves. We went to 3 caves. My favourite was the glow worm cave. It was over 2 days. The place we stayed at had its kitchen outside. Jack and I had to climb a ladder to get to bed. In the morning we jumped onto my mum and dads bed.   

I went to Wellington to see my cousins new house. My cousin names are Nina and Joseph. They came to How To Train Your Dragon 2 with us. That night we all helped to make diner. It was dumpling night. Nina and  I made beef mince. And the boys made prawns.  

I liked the Chateau best because of the dessert.

A moment in time...

At Night

I heard the cool breeze.

I heard the loud sound of my dad snoring.

I saw my big mirror.

I saw the dark roof .

I felt a the breeze hitting my face.

I felt my diary under my pillow.

I wondered if birds would fly into my room.

I wondered if I would wake up in the middle of  the night.

Stoney Creek Ranch Camp